TEWWG Journal #5

Pastiche


Then Peter began to think of Success. Success, that ever elusive creature with such a stealthy disguise who resided deep in America. The needed one who hid from every man and woman,  even though he hid in plain sight, in front of their very eyes. What reason does success have to hide, and what lucky person will ever be able to find him? He sits on top of buildings to better view his country. Sits patient and thoughtful all day with his choice made, waiting for a sign to confirm his selection. Been sitting in that very spot before there were people or a town or a country or a civilization. Peter was bound to receive a idea in his mind at any moment. He was nervous and frightened too. Poor Jack! He shouldn't have to confront this decision himself. Peter sent Consuela to him to set up a meeting, but Jack quickly Refused.  Those investors were okay with the small business owners, but they couldn't be held reliable for a situation like his. He'd be fine if the six-headed fiend offered a large sum of cash. He was going to succeed for sure. That was what he assumed. But Consuela told Peter differently, so he knew. And then if Consuela did not, the next week would tell Peter for sure, for Jack and his investors were huddled around a picnic table beneath an umbrella. Those investors would never have stayed that long before and clearly did not agree with Jack's ideas. Just sat around the table and fought. Failure, that sore loser, had claimed victory over Jack.

Statement of Intent


Re-reading my pastiche made me realize that I should have switched the places of my two abstract nouns. Since this pastiche was done very tight I had tried to copy the way the abstract nouns were used but since I used my more positive noun first, that messed it up because Hurston uses two abstract nouns that are more negative whereas I chose one that could be positive. Also, I tried to create a metaphor with a material object like Hurston does with the "feather from his wings" but with the nouns I chose the only phrase that makes sense was "an idea" which doesn't necessarily work as a metaphor in this situation.